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UER Forum > Archived UE Photo Critiques > Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building (Viewed 323 times) freeside  Location: Northern California Gender: Male eh vigo!  |  Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building < on 12/22/2007 7:44 AM >   I need some feedback and critique to improve my technique. Wait, that rhymes. haha. These were shot at night with ambient light from nearby street lights only. Long exposure on a tripod. Again, I like them, but they don't have the punch or emotional content I'm looking for, somehow, but I can't figure out what they need. Point out what you like or don't like. click to view looking towards Vallejo click to view rainy shadows and old equipment Thanks, mates. [last edit 12/22/2007 7:55 AM by freeside - edited 1 times] suicidepactphoto  Location: Western New York Gender: Male " Did he who made the lamb make thee? "  |  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 1 on 12/22/2007 10:04 AM >   very nice work. These have a great feel to em. I like the lines of the second shot but the first ones mood does it for me.. "We kiss on the mouth but still cough down our sleeves" http://www.flickr....ddictionheirlooms/ Dowcet  Location: Middletown, ct  |  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 2 on 12/22/2007 5:31 PM >   I wouldn't say these are lacking in "punch" or "emotional content", but the composition needs work. In #1 I love the hangars, the light/shadow, the color... If you cut out the whole left third it would work, but then you'd be missing the crane, which is a pretty cool feature. If you could take a few steps back so we can see the whole desk and the whole window, then you might have an especially amazing shot here. #2 is almost as interesting but has similar compositional issues, that is, a few of the corners and edges are distracting because you have objects cut off. Looks like a promising location, nice work. ElectricalFire  Burn baby burn!!!! Location: Anywhere I want to be. party naked.  |  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 3 on 12/27/2007 12:18 AM >   I love the first one. The second one just doesn't do it for me. [last edit 12/27/2007 12:19 AM by ElectricalFire - edited 1 times] Everybody is somebody else's weirdo. yumology  Location: Arizona Gender: Male  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 4 on 12/27/2007 5:23 AM >   I like the first one a lot. Thats a great exposure. Perfect lens for the situation. The shot offers nice depth too with the crane in the background and interesting shadows in foreground. Good work Martino  Location: Almere - NL Gender: Male 2,5 days 5691 km, 1200 cigarettes, 131 beers, 67 locations, 3 girs and 2 cars! I absolutely rule!  |  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 5 on 12/27/2007 1:28 PM >   #1 does have 'it' - #2 doesn't http://www.flickr.com/photos/martino_ freeside  Location: Northern California Gender: Male eh vigo!  |  Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building <Reply # 6 on 12/29/2007 7:48 PM >   Posted by Martino #1 does have 'it' - #2 doesn't Thanks Martino. I agree. Thanks for the feedback. UER Forum > Archived UE Photo Critiques > Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building (Viewed 323 times) All content and images copyright © 2002-2024 UER.CA and respective creators. Graphical Design by Crossfire. To contact webmaster, or click to email with problems or other questions about this site: UER CONTACT View Terms of Service | View Privacy Policy | Server colocation provided by Beanfield This page was generated for you in 156 milliseconds. Since June 23, 2002, a total of 738957423 pages have been generated.