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freeside
  
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< on 12/22/2007 7:44 AM >
|  | | | I need some feedback and critique to improve my technique. Wait, that rhymes. haha. These were shot at night with ambient light from nearby street lights only. Long exposure on a tripod.
Again, I like them, but they don't have the punch or emotional content I'm looking for, somehow, but I can't figure out what they need. Point out what you like or don't like.
looking towards Vallejo
rainy shadows and old equipment
Thanks, mates.
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| |  | Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building
<Reply # 1 on 12/22/2007 10:04 AM >
| | | | very nice work. These have a great feel to em. I like the lines of the second shot but the first ones mood does it for me..
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Dowcet
  
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| |  | Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building
<Reply # 2 on 12/22/2007 5:31 PM >
| | | | I wouldn't say these are lacking in "punch" or "emotional content", but the composition needs work. In #1 I love the hangars, the light/shadow, the color... If you cut out the whole left third it would work, but then you'd be missing the crane, which is a pretty cool feature. If you could take a few steps back so we can see the whole desk and the whole window, then you might have an especially amazing shot here.
#2 is almost as interesting but has similar compositional issues, that is, a few of the corners and edges are distracting because you have objects cut off.
Looks like a promising location, nice work.
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| |  | Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building
<Reply # 3 on 12/27/2007 12:18 AM >
| | | | I love the first one. The second one just doesn't do it for me.
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yumology
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<Reply # 4 on 12/27/2007 5:23 AM >
| | | | I like the first one a lot. Thats a great exposure. Perfect lens for the situation. The shot offers nice depth too with the crane in the background and interesting shadows in foreground. Good work
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| | | Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building
<Reply # 5 on 12/27/2007 1:28 PM >
| | | | #1 does have 'it' - #2 doesn't
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freeside
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| | Re: Mare Island - rainy night in the optics building
<Reply # 6 on 12/29/2007 7:48 PM >
| | | | Posted by Martino
#1 does have 'it' - #2 doesn't
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Thanks Martino. I agree.
Thanks for the feedback.
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